Here is my response to a Carry On Tuesday prompt that I never got around to posting.
I listen to the silence
Because it's better than
Listening to your empty
"I promise"
Or when you say
"I'm sorry"
And I know you don't mean it
Even worse is hearing you say
"I love you"
Because I know
You say it to keep me
Believing
So I listen to the silence
As you do also
16 comments:
Ooo...a bit of hurt there. Good to get it down and set it free.
Sometimes, even the preferable thing can be a bit sad...
Laura, I hear you on this. Your point is well made. Better that one makes no promise than one that one can't carry through on. Silence is better than that!
Oh my - I really like this and how it captures so well the trap that people often fall into.
Ohh ... this was sad ...
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Laura Maria,
It is sad and very disheartening, when we realise that our words have fallen on deaf ears. Silence is never an ideal answer.
Eileen
What a wonderful poem, full of silence ... Silence can bve soothing, but also hurting.
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Ouch...so poignant. Boiled right down to the point, great write.
Been there .... nicely written!
A lovely piece of writing. :-)
sometimes silence is better...
the pain came through beautifully.
♥
Beautiful poem!
Very well done Laura! I applaud your great skill at writing down your poetic expressions; I empathize for the pain, I think we all have been there, I know I have. Your talent for writing is super and I also would like to thank you for the warm welcome in the Pantry....so nice of you!!
so sad. but i listen to the silence too sometimes. x
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