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Paper planes weighted
With her dreams from yesterday
Fly without restraint
Human judgment is
Forsaken in exchange for
Freedom without end
For she truly knows
Life is nothing without dreams
And dying is gain
Saturday, October 15, 2011
Paper
Attempted to write a haiku for OSI and ended up with three verses :). The prompt this week is paper.
Paper planes weighted
With her dreams from yesterday
Fly without restraint
Human judgment is
Forsaken in exchange for
Freedom without end
For she truly knows
Life is nothing without dreams
And dying is gain
Paper planes weighted
With her dreams from yesterday
Fly without restraint
Human judgment is
Forsaken in exchange for
Freedom without end
For she truly knows
Life is nothing without dreams
And dying is gain
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22 comments:
OOO! Quite a heavy, sad last line! But paper dreams may lead to a new reality!
Thoughtful haiku. Enjoyed them.
We all have such dreams. It is good that we can get them onto paper. A very nice series of thought.
absolutely adore the 1st ku on this one. its very hopeful
so nice!!
Wonderful and thoughtful.
A triple haiku! Maybe you have created a new form of poetry... the tri-ku maybe?!
I really liked the first part of the poem.
Well done.
I particularly like that first one!
In depth, well-written. Especially "human judgement forsaken..."
I enjoy Haiku. Have for a long time. You made me chuckle when stating that your one turned to three. Oh yes, I understand that perfectly. I liked your Haiku, they are thoughtful and have depth.
I enjoyed each of your 'Paper' haikus, especially the airplane.
And, as a fellow Tree-Hugger,
Thanks for commenting on my Sunday Tree last week. I’ve posted a new ‘Tree’ and would like to invite you to write something in response to it – or to one of the earlier tress. The post can be found here:
http://writteninexile.blogspot.com/2011/10/sunday-trees-experimental-tree.html
Best wishes, Isabel
Lovely series of senryu. I love the image of the paper plane with dreams. Beautiful.
I enjoyed it.. very spirited !
Deep expressions seen here on your paper.
Paper planes weighted with dreams of yesterday...this hits home...although not paper planes I found some of my dreams written in a notebook from when I was around 17....I am still living one...I had scribbled Mrs. Charlie Clevenger...41 years later I still have that name :) Loved your poem!
sweet and wise!
amazing take on paper.
invite you to join our poetry picnic today,
1 to 3 random poems are welcome for first time participants, you can also write for our theme,
best.
hope to see your participation.
It's all been said already. The Haiku together paint a sad portrait. Nice work.
I liked each and every one of these. They stand on their own, and yet together are more than the sum of their parts.
Richard
excellent work,
i feel like dreaming about paper airplanes too
elephant slave
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