Saturday, October 15, 2011

Paper

Attempted to write a haiku for OSI and ended up with three verses :). The prompt this week is paper.
image courtesy of weheartit














Paper planes weighted
With her dreams from yesterday
Fly without restraint

Human judgment is
Forsaken in exchange for
Freedom without end

For she truly knows
Life is nothing without dreams
And dying is gain

22 comments:

Gemma Wiseman said...

OOO! Quite a heavy, sad last line! But paper dreams may lead to a new reality!

anthonynorth said...

Thoughtful haiku. Enjoyed them.

Lisa at Greenbow said...

We all have such dreams. It is good that we can get them onto paper. A very nice series of thought.

totomai said...

absolutely adore the 1st ku on this one. its very hopeful

Sandra said...

so nice!!

teric said...

Wonderful and thoughtful.

Adam said...

A triple haiku! Maybe you have created a new form of poetry... the tri-ku maybe?!

I really liked the first part of the poem.

Well done.

Mama Zen said...

I particularly like that first one!

Cynthia said...

In depth, well-written. Especially "human judgement forsaken..."

The Old Raven said...

I enjoy Haiku. Have for a long time. You made me chuckle when stating that your one turned to three. Oh yes, I understand that perfectly. I liked your Haiku, they are thoughtful and have depth.

Isabel Doyle said...

I enjoyed each of your 'Paper' haikus, especially the airplane.

And, as a fellow Tree-Hugger,
Thanks for commenting on my Sunday Tree last week. I’ve posted a new ‘Tree’ and would like to invite you to write something in response to it – or to one of the earlier tress. The post can be found here:
http://writteninexile.blogspot.com/2011/10/sunday-trees-experimental-tree.html
Best wishes, Isabel

Lolamouse said...

Lovely series of senryu. I love the image of the paper plane with dreams. Beautiful.

Ramesh Sood said...

I enjoyed it.. very spirited !

Maggie said...

Deep expressions seen here on your paper.

Susie Clevenger said...

Paper planes weighted with dreams of yesterday...this hits home...although not paper planes I found some of my dreams written in a notebook from when I was around 17....I am still living one...I had scribbled Mrs. Charlie Clevenger...41 years later I still have that name :) Loved your poem!

Sandra said...

sweet and wise!

Morning said...

amazing take on paper.

The Gooseberry Garden said...

invite you to join our poetry picnic today,

1 to 3 random poems are welcome for first time participants, you can also write for our theme,

best.

hope to see your participation.

booguloo said...

It's all been said already. The Haiku together paint a sad portrait. Nice work.

Mr. Walker said...

I liked each and every one of these. They stand on their own, and yet together are more than the sum of their parts.

Richard

Summer Rain said...

excellent work,

zongrik said...

i feel like dreaming about paper airplanes too

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