Saturday, October 13, 2012

Faith

image courtesy of Ella Wilson
I saw a child kneel in belief
Trusting in Him who lives on high
Her face devoid of any doubt
Expected Him to bring relief

Oh, that I had a faith as pure
So that I might my burdens lay
Down at His feet with gratitude
And thus my peace from Him secure!


The Sunday Mini-Challenge at the Garden this week is an envelope quatrain written in iambic tetrameter. This is the first time I have ever written a poem with meter, so it was quite a challenge! I hope I did it correctly. The rhyme scheme I chose for my envelope quatrain is axxa. To join in or to read the other contributions go here.
Special thanks to Ella for the use of her photograph!

21 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

I think this is a stunning response to the picture and the challenge as a whole. The stanzas read like classic poetry, and your message is gently conveyed by your word choice. I really enjoyed the read.

Green Speck said...

You have written the form perfectly ... I love trying out new poetic firms, and I guess I should try this one too ... thanks for sharing this :-)

J Cosmo Newbery said...

I am envious and respectful of people who have faith - but have not pathway to finding my own.

Mary said...

Beautiful! Oh for such a wonderful childlike faith as this.

Glad to see you in 'the pantry' again!

aprille said...

Competent and convincing, as we are beginning to expect from you.
The rhymeless centre reads well too. A soft centre maybe :-)

Hannah said...

Oh, yes...some of my favorite scripture...believing with the faith of a child...perfect for the image and written very well!!

Abin Chakraborty said...

there's a touch of Blake and his songs of innocence about this. and i also share your conundrum. innocence and faith are things that adult experience generally extinguishes.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Laura Maria,

I sincerely enjoyed your poem, for the religious quality in itself. I appreciate your forms of words so much...

Eileen

Serena said...

This is beautiful and touching...

Kim Nelson said...

Gorgeous. Simple. Faith-filled. Lyrical.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

WOW, if that is your first attempt at meter, you have been wildly successful! This reads so beautifully and made me wish for that same kind of faith, too.

Susan said...

Perfect in image, form, content and spirit! Thank you for this gift.

rch said...

This is just superb, you should challenge yourself more often.

amidemanila said...

I too have moments like this...great work!

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh to have the faith of a child...such a beautiful poetic response to the challenge.

SaraV said...

A beautiful poem and I love the form as well! A child's faith is always uplifting.

Mary Mansfield said...

Gorgeous writing, great job with this form!

Poet Laundry said...

I like this bit of capture of pure faith Laura...so nice to be reminded of it.

Panchali said...

I love this, Laura...there's serenity, purity and hope in every line that makes this little one's faith so sincere. Lovely...

Kay L. Davies said...

Beautifully done. I remember being a child with faith like that.

Kay, Alberta, Canada

chips from a life said...

well, would like to know more about this form of poetry.
well written