tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post4496343742951735526..comments2023-05-13T03:40:37.523-05:00Comments on Paper Thoughts: Great one liners - Write on WednesdayLaura Mariahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17165700659874093849noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-34514972759357444682011-09-10T08:39:32.216-05:002011-09-10T08:39:32.216-05:00I like the first one. The ending was great. Cold i...I like the first one. The ending was great. Cold in the form of a face. Great work!<br /><br />Gill xInkPaperPenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14595595934607152505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-20230383916571591842011-09-10T01:16:30.319-05:002011-09-10T01:16:30.319-05:00I like the first one. Long devouring years confuse...I like the first one. Long devouring years confuses me though: isn't it good that your soul hasn't seen the cold until now? Wouldn't those years therefore be good, not long? Can I suggest you take out 'long devouring years'. I think its a lot stronger without it.<br />I do like the term though, you should definitely use it again in your writing.<br />Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-29986160664634178262011-09-08T20:26:10.928-05:002011-09-08T20:26:10.928-05:00I love both of these. The emotion in each one is j...I love both of these. The emotion in each one is just beautiful.<br />Well done in writing two...I had enough trouble with just one!<br /><br />By the way, I've just nominated you for a Versatile Blogger Award. Pop over to my page to check it out!Lenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01967670281829933493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-39765905748733437802011-09-08T15:38:58.494-05:002011-09-08T15:38:58.494-05:00I think I'm partial to the first, but they'...I think I'm partial to the first, but they're both great!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-34249221329906380982011-09-07T23:54:40.906-05:002011-09-07T23:54:40.906-05:00I love, love the second one. What a great descrip...I love, love the second one. What a great description of an emotion!Janellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06459852025135239788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-52628693648052652862011-09-07T13:38:08.127-05:002011-09-07T13:38:08.127-05:00I love the second one!I love the second one!Jaimee Hunterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10735348809998154246noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-51279903090483668202011-09-07T01:46:50.471-05:002011-09-07T01:46:50.471-05:00I loved both of these! They conjure up great image...I loved both of these! They conjure up great imagery as well as deliver the emotion eloquently. :)Melinda Chapmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11391417659960697968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2983270705805929763.post-71939278796632589792011-09-06T23:21:13.361-05:002011-09-06T23:21:13.361-05:00I think I like the first one better. It's dark...I think I like the first one better. It's darker, but more descriptive, yet still leaving more to the imagination.Kerryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07000402109977122989noreply@blogger.com